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Winter is Coming by Ruwich

:iconkristynjanelle:
Hello! Going to go ahead and try a little critique here, so here it goes :)

Vision : I would always give 5 stars in the vision department if it involves a bird! Any drawing with a bird is well envisioned in my opinion! Haha.

Originality : This is not a common species of bird that you see drawn, and I like the color scheme. Very cute and sets it apart.

Technique : Ah, technique... the place most of us have room to improve! I think you're off to a good start here. The first thing I notice, though, is that the feet and beak don't seem very solid. It's important to make them solid to contrast the feathers. I would say try to make them more bold, with darker shadows and lighter highlights, and make sure the edge of them looks sharp, as the branch's edges do. I also feel like the eye stands out too much on the face, looks very obviously drawn on whereas the rest blends more nicely. Perhaps try adding a ring around the eye, like a lot of birds have, and more gradual highlights. For the feathers, I won't give a critique, because I feel you're doing alright there and there are other aspects that would improve the drawing more drastically.

Impact : It looks good to me, but I think with some practice, it could have a lot more impact overall. Good job :)
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KristynJanelle Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
For feathers, the easiest way I can explain is with a tutorial I made, hopefully it's helpful! [link]

For the shading and highlights on the beak and feet, just decide where the light source is from and start from there. I'd say with this picture, a good start would be to say that the light source is from the upper right corner. Usually on the beak their will be two lines of highlights running along the outer edge. Then it will be darker towards the top that connects to the face, and the back next to the feathers. And usually there are a few scratches here and there. Sorry if that doesn't make sense, I am planning on doing a beak tutorial soon!

For the feet, I usually shade the them in litte C-shaped on one side, since the bottom of the birds foot has ridges like that. Then just add a few highlights as dots or lines, depending on what kind of foot the bird has. If their foot looks like it has scales, highlight with dots, and if it looks more like a bunch of lines (which I'm guessing this one does) highlight with lines. Feet are the hardest for me personally.

Sorry if I came across as harsh, I wasn't trying to! ^^;
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Ruwich Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No, it wasn't harsh! I'm actually really grateful! :hug:

I mean, thank you for taking the time to provide me with a constructive critique and give me tips! :D
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KristynJanelle Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
No problem! I do my best to be helpful :aww:
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Ruwich Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aww thanks for the honest critique! May you please tell me how I can improve with highlights, shading, and feathers? :)
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